BA8 Description:
* Does the initial focus of your draft as expressed in your thesis statement need revision?
* Are your purpose for writing and target audience easily identified after reading your draft? If you need to revise your thesis (and thus, a substantial portion of your paper), or if you need to better focus your purpose and identify your audience, your revisions of your conclusion might start with those areas. You may need to make sure that your main point(s) are restated clearly, and that your readers understand the implications of your analysis. If you are satisfied with your focus, purpose, and audience, study your conclusion to determine how clearly it reads. You may need to revise for coherence, emphasis, or conciseness (see Chs. 40 and 43 of your e-handbook), or you may need to work on sentence structure (Chs. 34-39 of your e-handbook).
If you need to work on specific grammatical and/or mechanical issues, consult the appropriate chapters in your e-handbook. Next, review the strategies for writing conclusions in section 5f2 of The St. Martin’s Handbook. Then, copy and paste your original conclusion from your 1.1 draft and re-read it. In a brief sentence or two, identify and explain which of the strategies from the textbook you used in composing this conclusion.
If you cannot identify one of these strategies in your conclusion, then describe the strategy you had in mind.
Next, revise your conclusion. You must incorporate a strategy from the textbook that is different from the structure your conclusion originally used. Finally, write a short summary and evaluation of your revisions. Identify and explain which new strategy you used from the textbook and explain how changing the strategies used in your conclusion will influence your readers’ response to your analysis. Also let readers know here which conclusion, your original or the revision, is the strongest and why you believe that to be so.
The total length of the analysis should be 350-500 words, NOT including the original and revised conclusions.
MY ADDITION: Include the same labels that I asked you to include on BA7: Original Conclusion, Summary/Analysis on Original Conclusion, Revised Conclusion, Summary/Analysis of Revised Conclusion.
Homework & Readings for class next Thursday (11/10/2011):
· BA 8 due Tuesday, Nov. 8th by 11:59p.m.
· Readings for next week:
· St. Martin’s Handbook
· Part 1, Sections 4i, 4k-l, 5a-b, 5d-e, “Revising Paragraphs Sentences, Words, and Tone,” “Editing,” “Proofreading the Final Draft” (pp. 94-98,100-104)
· Part 8, Sections 40, 43, “Concise Writing,” “Memorable Prose” (pp. 680-685, 700-706)
· Also, bring in your weakest body paragraph
· Copy/paste it onto a new page, print it out, and bring it in.
ENGL 1301 